Pobble: Animal town
Animal Town
Finally, it was the day that the Queen was coming to our petite little town said, Mayor king. King
was a mighty, strong, he was so frightened that when he roared it was like you are in a colossal
earthquake. Everything in front of him gets completely destroyed. But he doesn’t roar at all he
only roars when he has to protect the town he is really friendly otherwise. A few days ago our
whole town came together and we had a grooming party we had to look our best for the Queen’s
grand arrival.
was a mighty, strong, he was so frightened that when he roared it was like you are in a colossal
earthquake. Everything in front of him gets completely destroyed. But he doesn’t roar at all he
only roars when he has to protect the town he is really friendly otherwise. A few days ago our
whole town came together and we had a grooming party we had to look our best for the Queen’s
grand arrival.
This was our only chance to get noticed this was a wonderful opportunity because the Queen
was a human unlike us so our town is very special and should be noticed in those really boring
species of paper with squiggly lines that I think humans call what was it again I say to my very
annoying older sister what do you want she says whats the squiggly lines on the weird pieces of
paper humans read you mean a newspaper yay the newspapers. Did you introduce who we are
the introduction sorry about that we are the meercat sisters we are the reporters our detectives
in the town, we crack the biggest cases we helped King find his lucky pillow. But know this will
be our best-case ever.
was a human unlike us so our town is very special and should be noticed in those really boring
species of paper with squiggly lines that I think humans call what was it again I say to my very
annoying older sister what do you want she says whats the squiggly lines on the weird pieces of
paper humans read you mean a newspaper yay the newspapers. Did you introduce who we are
the introduction sorry about that we are the meercat sisters we are the reporters our detectives
in the town, we crack the biggest cases we helped King find his lucky pillow. But know this will
be our best-case ever.
Gallop gallop the Queen has arrived yay we all cheer as the queen’s carriage comes up to our
gates she blocks her ears and we all realize that she can’t hear us king walks up to the carriage
and the horses rear up in fear the queen screams lion and shuffles to the back this makes him
upset and frightened bang! One of the horses kicks King right in the face and the coachman
pulls out a gun and aims it at King
RRRROOOOOAAAAARRRRR!!!!
gates she blocks her ears and we all realize that she can’t hear us king walks up to the carriage
and the horses rear up in fear the queen screams lion and shuffles to the back this makes him
upset and frightened bang! One of the horses kicks King right in the face and the coachman
pulls out a gun and aims it at King
RRRROOOOOAAAAARRRRR!!!!
The whole carriage is sent flying through the air and the queen ends up in the hospital we end upin those things called newspapers just listen to me for a second WHY is it called a newspaper
why not meercat news everyone knows meerkats are the best at telling stories but back to the
story our gates were closed forever and I mean forever not just a little while. But we went viral
and they got a picture of our town for the newspaper why is it called newspaper from now on I’m
calling it the meercat news they took a picture fo the meercat news and I’m in it see there is me
right in the corner I’m the one in front of my sister the one closest stripes the zebra.
Hi Yashvi, I think you have a very engaging narrative with some interesting characters like the meerkat sisters who are also detectives. Please remember to proofread your writing for missing punctuation, and that your sentences sound right.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you filled your writing with interesting punctuation and adjectives. Maybe you could try add some quotation marks to your writing. - Anika
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